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Your job is to rewrite the following paragraph into something truly scary and/or interesting. A few rules to this: 1) You may not alter the character's actions or intentions, only make the description engaging. (ie. if the character is too scared to look behind the curtains, he/she still has to show that fear (you just have to show the DETAILS as to WHY it is so horrifying to look behind the curtains). 2) Be careful not to use too many $1, 000, 000 words. You don't want to add too much or it will come across as clutter. 3) Spelling counts! 4) Post your paragraph on the DISCUSSION forum tab.

//**The air was heavy. The dark of night hung around Derek's shoulders like a weight.**// //**He thought about this as he stood motionless on the front porch of his cabin. He knew he had forgotten his torch at the campfire earlier that night and it was up to him to go out into the dark unknown and retrieve it. No one else would do it for him.**// //**But the terror he felt even placing one foot down onto the first step was enough to send shivers up his back like small needles.**// //**How could he make it across the field? It was like looking out into a black sea without a boat or a paddle.**// //**Sarah, in cabin 4, had made some wild claims at dinner at the dining hall earlier that night. She was absolutely pale with fear and kept repeating, "Don't be caught alone, don't be caught at night. She will take your breath away and give you such a fright."**// //**The words replayed in Derek's head like some twisted merry-go-round.**//